One of the most exciting moments of my life
Last year, I will never forget the exciting moment when I joined in the Bodyslam concert. Bodyslam is the rock band that I like the singer very much because he's handsome. They have a lot of beautiful song and I can sing every song. One day, I know that Bodyslam free concert will show near my university.We arrived about half an hour early so the place was just starting to fill up. As I walked closer and closer to the stage , I felt myself getting notably excited. Then my friends and I enjoyed in concert. We sang and danced together."These great to hear song of a band that I love " I thought with myself. After the concert ended, we went back to our dormitory. We were happy and very enjoyable.Concerts are out there, so get out and splurge on your favorite band or go to a concert by an unknown artist just for the hell of it. Squeeze your way into the front of the pit or be the one on stage everyone is eager to see. Whatever it is, may all your concert experiences be fun, exciting and memorable. It was a really good experience for me.Although it was long time ago but I can still remember that moment.
Your score is 8.5
ตอบลบBecause I think your story and the title are interesting. The grammatical structures are correctly. But you give the appropriate supporting information of paragraph and conclusions are not clearly. And well-organized are moderation.
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ตอบลบYour story is not bad. I think that you can add the details about your feel more. Your topic is ok but it is not interesting enough. I give you 7.3/10
ตอบลบThe story is OK. I will give you 8.5 points.
ตอบลบThank you for sharing your exciting experience. I think you should add more information it will make your story completely and the sentence "it was long time ago but I can still remember that moment." I think you should write this "it was a long time ago, but I can still remember that moment. So I give you 7.5/10.
ตอบลบIt's a very exciting story, lol. It's very interesting. I will give you 8.5 points.
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