My Favorite Place
I know
everyone must have a place to go to relax in their free time, same as me.This is a
picture of my room. It is located in Chiang Mai. I often spend time in this
quiet room.
Whether it
is for work, reading, or when I'm stressed out of things.
My holidays ago, I woke up in the morning, and opened the sliding glass door.
After that
I still lying on the floor in the middle of my room near my lazy cat named
Moshi
I saw the
beautiful blue sky and smelled the fresh natural.Every
morning, my mom will come with the hot cocoa. It is very tasty and I really
love it and I love to drink the hot cocoa at the terrace. Because I heard a
song of birds and heard the sound of the blowing wind. The blowing wind touched
me while drinking the hot cocoa. It is a very special thing. It made me feel
like I was a princess in a fairy tale in the woods that have the animals is
friends.
Moshi
looking at me with a smiling face and singing an opera song, it is hungry already
so I brought some food for him. Then I
always tell my bad story and he always listened to me. Moshi is a special
friend in my favorite place.
My room is the best, I always feel relaxed and
happy. It makes me forget the stresses that come from the outside. And this is
the whole reason why I choose my room as my favorite place.

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