First time in
China
Outline
1.Who were involved in the story?
Myself and my sisters.
2. What happened?
Traveled at China.
3. When did the story happen?
2 months ago.
4. Where did the story happen?
China.
Myself and my sisters.
2. What happened?
Traveled at China.
3. When did the story happen?
2 months ago.
4. Where did the story happen?
China.
5.
How did it happen?
- My sister won on the last three numbers in a lottery.
- We decided to travel to China.
- It's my first time of going aboard.
- We went to many places together.
- I want to go to the Great Wall of China.
- I failed the Great Wall of China.
Why did you failed the great wall of China?
Because it was raining.
How did the story end?
I still happy and hope to see her again soon.
- My sister won on the last three numbers in a lottery.
- We decided to travel to China.
- It's my first time of going aboard.
- We went to many places together.
- I want to go to the Great Wall of China.
- I failed the Great Wall of China.
Why did you failed the great wall of China?
Because it was raining.
How did the story end?
I still happy and hope to see her again soon.
First time in
China
Two months ago, I still remember
how I had a happy time when my sister won on the last three numbers in a
lottery, I feel surprised when I heard this news.
She invited me to go abroad. We
decided to travel at China. This is my first time that I went aboard and I was
very excited. Sometime, I am afraid because it was a very bumpy flight. We also traveled to many places and doing a
lot of activities for instance, take a lot of photos at Birds Nest Stadium, sightseeing
the Forbidden City. We want to go to the Great Wall of China but, we failed the
Great Wall of China because it was raining that day made us a little
disappointed. During my stay with my sister in China is the happy time because
We rarely together frequently. This time we have spent together closely to 5 days.
Although time has passed two months ago but I still happy. Now, I am thinking about them and hope to see them again .
I was excited and saw many attractions. It makes me want to go out with you.But there may be some sentences or words that are slightly wrong. 8.5/10
ตอบลบWow! Your photos are nice. Your story is good, well organize. So I give you 9/10
ตอบลบI was excited and this picture is so cute. I will give you 9 points.
ตอบลบThank you for sharing your exciting experience. I think you should add more information it will make your story completely and you have a wrong word, such as Sometimes, in china and you should put "the" before the place. However, your story is easy to understand and interesting. So I give you 8.5/10.
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